Relaxed,chilled the crocodile waited for the plover bird to appear. Suddenly the soft,smooth plover bird glided to the crocodile , The crocodile opened its massive jaws and the plover bird pecked away on the rotten,disintegrated teeth .Then the crocodile forgot the plover bird was pecking so the crocodile closed his mouth and swallowed the bird. He shouted for help.
Then a cheeky monkey got some pepper out of the explorers bag and put a sprinkle of pepper on the crocodile and it made the crocodile sneeze. Then he spat out the plover bird. The crocodile never ate meat again and had oranges forever.
mrslathamsclass 
Hi Georgia,
This is a very detailed piece of writing of which you should be very proud. You have included small, thoughtful detail in your writing which emphasises the points you are trying to make. You have structured your writing very well and you have ensured that all of your points link from the previous one. Your first paragraph draws the reader in and keeps them interested through your choice of vocabulary and emphasis. However, your second paragraph is not as strong but is still good. Try to make sure you include similar vocabulary throughout and your sentence starters are powerful.
Well done Georgia.
Mr McKean (Team 100wc)
I loved this story! What a clever way to use the prompt. I thought the introduction was beautiful and I could imagine the scene very clearly. This story made me smile. Very well done.