Patiently, waiting for the animal to pursue it’s territory. The crocodile surveyed it’s outer-world with it’s sinister,ignited eyes, whereas the cacophony of animals charged. Bang! Clash!! As the group of animals stampeded through the water. Soon it will make contact with the crocodile. The crocodile surged through the air, with such velocity, that it forgot to veil it’s secret weaponry.
The crocodile grasped the creature and sneezed as a fume of pepper inserted into it’s nose. His soft interior was blown like a storm. Masticating, the dead animal with a death roll made him sick. Nonetheless, eating the finished remains, he began eating oranges…
mrslathamsclass 
Oh Dong Nan, how I wish I had the vocabulary and drive you have to write in this way. You include imaginative and unique vocabulary that not only draws in the reader but inspires them also. You include clever conjunctions that link perfectly to the next point you are going to make. This sentence ‘ the crocodile surged through the air, with such velocity, that it forgot to veil it’s secret weaponry,’ stunned me as you have collated your knowledge of various subject areas and put them into one powerful sentence. Well done Dong nan. Next time, think about how you start each of your sentences so ensure you start each of them differently and vary the structure of your sentences.
Well done Dong Nan. This is a very impressive piece of writing.
Mr McKean (team 100wc)