There I was sitting watching tv, when suddenly I heard a rustling sound coming from the backroom. It sounded like someone was playing a grand white piano, however It was a sad sound when I heard it. I was unhappy when it played I walked down stairs to see …
a pink gorilla was playing on my dads grand piano! also the wall was pink. I was feeling unhappy to see a gorilla in my house I told it to shew but it was being ignorant to me. I saw the tears in his eyes. I made him laugh and because of my joke it laughed too.
mrslathamsclass 
Very funny, and great use of ellipses.
Hi Jack. You managed to fit a lot of description into your story this week. Fancy finding a gorilla in your bathroom. I wonder why it was sad? Well done.
Wow jack that was the greatest story you have ever produced I’m amazed when i got to the end i was speechless ceep up the good work
Conner/friend
Sorry it’s hard tiping on a tablet it,s supost to be keep up the good work
I am speechless because of this amazing work Jack!!! 🙂
This is great story, keep up the good work.
Very good piece of work Jack! Keep it up 🙂