Excitedly,Ibrahim and I rushed to the park something got my attention a sign saying “come in for candy!” As I went in Ibrahim followed me as the door closed behind us,I tried to open the door but it wouldn’t open. As I looked around I saw dolls not ordinary dolls the dolls which stare at you I panicked and said”Ibrahim what are we going to do” Ibrahim was standing still shocked pointing at a doll the doll looked like me.
As I ran to the doll touching his hand suddenly light flashed before my eyes Ibrahim disappeared iv been expecting you…
mrslathamsclass 
Well done , you made me want to read on with how you started off your story. Take care to use more punctuation though. For example; As i looked around i saw dolls, not ordinary dolls, the dolls which stare at you.Using the punctuation i have added would make the reader pause more and give a greater effect. You make me want to know what happens next with how well you ended your 100WC piece of writing.