Relaxed,chilled the crocodile waited patiently for the soft plover bird the plover bird appeared.It started to peck on the hard,rotten teeth.Snap! The crocodile closed his jaw by accident and swallowed the plover bird. Sad, upset, the crocodile begged for help.
A brown, cheeky monkey appeared and replied ” Super monkey to the rescue!”. Looking in a bag, the cheeky monkey grabbed the pepper and sprinkled it on the green crocodile.
” Hachu!!!”. The plover bird popped out and the crocodiles the teeth were gone. The cheeky monkey ran away as quick as lightning. The crocodile had to eat oranges and never forgot about that day.
mrslathamsclass 
Hi Naife,
WOW! What a dramatic improvement in your writing when you put your mind to it. I am very impressed! You have included a good range of adjectives and you have ensured that they fit into your writing. Your use of a simile to describe how quick he ran proves very effective and creates an image in the readers’ mind. For next time, try and think of more interesting verbs – such as looking that could be changed for ‘scanning,’ ‘surveying’ or ‘gazing into the bag.’
Keep up the excellent work Naife! You could be writing your own novel one day!
Mr McKean (team 100wc)
Well done for entering this week’s 100 Word Challenge Naife. I like the way you started your writing, setting up the scene of the crocodile waiting patiently. You have used some great noun groups – the hard, rotten teeth, a brown, cheeky monkey. They make your writing stronger and gives me a great picture in my mind of your characters. Keep writing.