Goldilocks woke up, and his eyes stared into hers. “Look at poor little Goldilocks. All alone, nobody to help her. Boo hoo!” Chuckled Baby Bear. “You don’t want porridge now, do you?”
SPLAT! Goldilocks was smothered in porridge. There was so much, that she felt like she was suffocating.
“Why are you doing this?” She gasped.
“To get my revenge!”
“You can take my cornflakes, but not my porridge! Now, this is exciting. Release the lion!” The lion circled her stealthily, and its roar was as loud as a drum. He danced around evilly. “Let’s see how this turns out!…”
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I love the how your story is funny
I liked how you put a twist into this story.
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