He was shocked to find…lots and lots of laughter and lots of smiles. There were lots of bright colours and lots of dreams in these dreams there was a chocolate river, talking fruit also trees that grow money on them. Every time lord Nulth saw or herd his nails also, his noes became smaller and smaller. He then became weaker and weaker. As he became weak he then became smaller then ,he grew hair. After that he got cute big eyes ,at the very end he became a cute cuddly warm panda teddy bear. All the robots crowded around this teddy and they stopped , stared.
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Well done Jessica. I am pleased Lord Nulth is defeated, and turning him into a bear is a great result! I love your final sentence, with the final comma – it is very effective. You have used some great language, but to improve your writing even more, remember to check your punctuation carefully. A super ending to the story – keep up the good work!!
Hi Jessica.
What a great thing to happen to Lord Nulth! I am glad he became a cute panda bear. Your first sentence is very effective however be careful not to use the word ‘lots’ too many times as it loses its power. Again, be careful to check your punctuation. I loved your story. Keep writing!