In our old house was a cupboard which had never been opened and I never wanted to. But one day I had to. I was frightened, but when I opened the cupboard door something shouted” come closer.” So I did. I couldn’t move then suddenly the door locked and someone pulled me. I started to bang on the doors and scream for help. It was pitch black so it made me even more scared. I heard the door handle fall off and a white shadow skimmed my face. I knew it was a ghost that did this to me and it was game over.
mrslathamsclass 
Well done, Connor.
This is a mysterious piece of writing, told in clear sentences with some interesting details. I guess you don’t really have the space to explain why the cupboard had to be opened.
Keep up the good work!
An engaging and thrilling story! You had some short sentences which were effective in giving the story a greater impact. Your story is a good read Connor. A very good job!
very creative